Sometimes I have these typical two-chord patterns in my head myself, often in combination with a particular thought, and then this thought becomes a hookline and starts echoeing in my head. Then I try to build a song around it, with verses and other parts and a guitar solo and so on, just to make it compatible with the format that listeners are used to. Seems that you took a different approach here. If the intention was to reduce it to the max, to focus on the message and nothing else, to leave away all unnecessary additions or gimmicks, then this is well done. If not, then it rather seems like a sketch, an early version, somehow raw and unfinished. If the latter is the case then I'd be eager to hear the final version.

Great captivating of lyrics and song you somehow put your emotions into this one and it came across with high energy in the topic that you have chosen, the melody fits the crime in a figure of speech lol I do love the instrument behind it as well and you should be proud of this arrangement that you have put together. So let me not go too far but I will give you your points and go away lol good job keep it up ????????

I enjoyed this song, the musical composition had a nice intro, melody and chord structure. I like the story being told in the lyrics, and the lyrics fit the music nicely. Also, the mix of the music gave room for the vocals to be heard. I have a concern with the recording that the reverb, especially on the vocals, was a bit too much for my ears, and also made it difficult to understand the words at times. My second concern is about the lyrics themselves. I think that in places you could pare down the the song, some lines seem wordy and could be pared down without changing the meaning, and the song could flow better vocally. Good job!

You we’re feeling yourself I feel it but ease off the the reverb a bit and I can hear you and also feel your music better but overall I like it. You on your way I feel your vibe and where you going it’s dope. My question is what we’re you initially feeling when you made this track? I would love to hear your personal insights.

Hey guys. It's me again, spiceypete. A sweet song you got here. It's a bit of a minimalistic composition ( could be a little more elaborate), but the voice is good, the instrumentation is allright ( beautiful guitar) and the lyrics are great. The song sounds sweet... and cuddly ( cute). It makes me want to give a hug to the singer. The effect on the voice is well thought of, but try to pronounce the words a bit more clearly. Still. Good piece, good song. I'd love to hear more from you guys. Any new songs coming up ? You can always mail me. So. feel free to do so. Pieter B. from Ghent, Belgium

Bunnylandband BunnyLandBand Great acoustics and tune. Washington state ?? i was there in 1976 Ft Lewis great tunes on your page if ya can take a listen to one of my new tunes over all great music

This is a great song. It’s very different in so many ways I can’t describe. I want you to continue keeping up the good work and making good music for all of us. Your voice is on point and it matches the vocals and the instruments to the song. The background vocals are on point and they collaborate with your vocals. I will put this song on my playlist and play it each time I see it. Thank you so much for your good music.

Dear Fellow Songwriter, After listening to your song "Just Go Away" I noticed a few things that I really liked about it, and a few things that I personally feel could possibly help improve it. The Pros I really liked most about this song were your musical chord structures on the acoustic guitar and the musical accompaniment. It was very easy to listen to and quite enjoyable. The Cons regarding this song in my opinion is that the vocal effects are too saturated. You might try reducing the amount of echo/slap back and reverb, mostly the echo or slap-back could be greatly reduced to better match the instruments. Pay particular attention to the amount of effects you use on your acoustic guitar and other instruments. Then match the vocal track for the best possible sound, tone, and feel. In my recordings, I usually try to use just enough effects to enhance the song without oversaturating them with too much effect processing. I find that too much effects processing tends to throw my songs off balance and muddy up my songs. I am a big fan of a dab of slap-back or echo with a tad of reverb. My Recommendations and/or Suggestions would be to lighten up on the vocal effects processing and find approximately 5 to 10 people who will be brutally honest with you & tell you what they honestly like & dislike about each song you write. I find that having a group of 5 to 10 people to evaluate/review my songs often greatly enhances each song I write. And of course, being a member of N1M provides excellent feedback. Befriend 5 or 10 people here at N1M and ask them to help you by giving you an honest review with their recommendations & suggestions. Something else I always recommend to my fellow songwriter brothers & sisters is to grab a copy of author Sheila Davis's book "The Craft of Lyric Writing." It has helped me to greatly improve my songwriting structure. I hope this review has been helpful. I believe you are definitely on the right track and this song has potential. I wish you the best of luck and much success with your music. Sincerely, Millard Randolph Curry

"Just Go Away" , by Cary and The Bunny Land Band has a really nice instrumental intro with the guitar, bass and drums. When the vocals begin, I feel the effects are a little too strong and there are parts where the vocals could be "tuned in" a bit better. The overall melody is really nice. I like the guitar progressions and sounds and the overall mix is good too.

Had a very mellow introduction. I thought the music was made nice and had a very special sound to it. Vocals had a bit to much reverb. But the lyrics were good and it was worth a listen. Wish you the best!! Profit

So I was reviewing your track and I got the gist of it Melody was good the beat was pretty good I could understand the lyrics but it just wasn’t as crisp as I would like it in my personal preference work a little on the vocals and I would say you got it all around the track

wow what a beautiful song love the sounds and muscianship............this song has a really good melody lines I can hear this song over and over............they the song was put together is very unique..........just love the way its sung the vocals are spot on the guitars, drums and. Both guitars were played perfectly...............can't say enough about this song ............I want to thank you for letting me review your amazing song thsnk you.......... This is steve from voodoo dancer and thank you again.....................

A very well constructed track. The only issue that I had was the echo on the vocals is too far apart sonically. I would pan the vocals a little closer together and I would do the same with the double track. I would not have as much of an echo. So, not including the producing criticism (which is very minor), it is a very good song, I like the tune, the instrumentals are good, the vocals are good just that echo..so 4 stars for sure!!

Nice little intro.. Still don't understand the vocal.. I don't know if the vocalist is afraid of his own voice since it has to be souped up like this.. I would prefer it with a vocal a bit more "clean. But nice little song without a chorus.

Let me begin by letting you know how I will be addressing your song. I review from a commercial standpoint…..which is to say how would your composition fair if you were trying to place your song with a publishing firm? The other alternative would be you as artist. If that were the case then one either likes or dislikes what you have produced. That is not my agenda as I stated earlier. You have a nice start to a song. If it were me there are a few things I might consider. The slap back echo on the voice tends to distract from the lyrical content. It may be that's how you're dealing with latency on your DAW. Maybe consider pulling back echos using the mix balance between original voice and generated delays. The hook "Just Go Away" seems a little under supported lyrically. You have some good lines but consider looking for better word choices that tie directly into the concept of "Just Go Away" A good source to check out would be the artists you like. See how they deal with lyric's / form / and prosody. Rewriting is not high on my list of fun things to do but the effort you put into that chore is always worth the effort. Again...nice start....and.... Keep Writing! RW

Just Go Away, Soft Rock category, starts with a two chord progression over solo acoustic guitar rhythms and consistently continues as the lead vocals come in with keyboard sample effects. The drum machine, keyboard effects, and bass fill out the rest of this song. It was difficult and straining to understand the quality of the lyric writing because the vocal track was far too wet and the vocal dynamics got obscured. Also this song does not feel like it was mastered or properly or compressed, this feels very much like a demo or scratch track and it is not ready for radio play. Two chord songs can work, and one chords songs are out there and have huge appeal in most styles of music, for ex: John Lee Hooker's repertoire has one chord songs, Koko Taylor's "Wang Dang Doodle", successful simple arrangements are far too many to count but one must be able to hear the story. Also dynamics wise, everything was the same, there was no excitement or skills that shone, it really feels like this needs more wood-shedding. Something easy and yet effective is to comp the same chords in another position as you build, or try chord voicing and maybe syncopate the second guitars part to add some pepper to the track, and I would encourage the vocalist to approach the mic with less affect and focus on vocal quality and delivery, the bassist could work with octaves or a simple dynamic pattern. What made a group like Kool and the Gang stand out was they always had a killer bass line. It was never complicated but it hooked you and they built their compositions around it. Go back and listen. Although the early Mother's of Invention, Captain Beefheart, and a few other 60's bands came in very loose in the studio eventually they caught on. Don't give up. Keep writing, keep playing, keep recording, keep sharing, keep following your dreams. Be great - VM

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I love the light-hearted feeling of the guitar throughout this song, and the general mood of the music is really nice. The lyrics are so sad, which I think is an interesting combination with the light-hearted music. I like it. The one thing I might suggest is to change the effects you put on your vocals. The echo and wah-wah effects made it difficult to understand the lyrics in some spots, but you have a nice voice so I think you should let it shine a little more. Maybe think about adding some harmony lines to spice up the emotional grab of the song. Good work, keep it up!