when a melody or something in the song keeps the mind of the listener , it is the most important thing, because he then say “i buy”; not my genre but here all develope very slowly and seems to be too monotone; you could improve to be more catchy, but this is not my genre; keep it up and good luck

I keep forgetting that house music doesn't usually have lyrical content. I keep waiting for the lyrics but the beat keep me tuned in. All in all i thought it was a good piece of work. Keep pushing my friend

Like the direction you started going in the beginning but this sounds like its moving towards an upbeat fast pace song. Intro could get more exiting more quicker. Through out song would be cool 2 hear a different pace every once in awhile. Over all keep doin u.

It's not the kind of music i usually listen to. From the point of view of a profane listener, i find it monotonous and "un tormentone" as they say in Italy.

hi....i have some constructive critisism for you that you just might use very nice beat by the way....if you had repeated the beginning vocal once more you would have a nice composition...try to see what i say....i know if you just do this you will see where to compose your vocals from then on...it's hard to arrange a song , if you compose a song then you can arrange ti in a remix..think so?very good try ...maybe you can follow my advice, good idea here and lots of talent

That's a fun sound.... if you could add in some really awesome cultural drumming... African perhaps, and some cool African sounding singing/ chanting (think Sting's influence) Then to really hit this song home... add an amazing female melody to weave in and out with a bassy sounding male response.

Intro a bit too long. The song needs one more pattern to create a climax. I'd add an open hi-hat at 3/4 of the song to increase the groove. Interesting sounds. HUMAN AFTERMATH