Like the story line of how you wish you could change things between a person. You once have loved. Great on the guitar kinda shaky in the voice loved the talking parts. kinda of a new school version of a old school song from smokey Robinson. Keep writing and enjoy what your doing. But try not to get to emotional you can hear it the music. Sometimes it's a thing. But sometimes it can be to much an make you lose the audience.

Hello, Let me begin by saying that I review in terms of commercial viability.... (can the song be pitched to an established artist?). The other review path would be from an artistic point of view.... which to me simply means..... you either like or don't. I like the concept of your hook... but I feel lyrical let down by the word choices used to support the main idea.... Which is not to say that there are not some good lines, but that the payoff feels a little disconnected to me. If it were me I would listen to some of the artists you admire and see how they support the "Hook" and try to utilize some of the ideas used. Rewriting is a necessary evil when it comes to honing your craft. The mix feels a little off balance to me as well. The kick drum is too dominate for my taste and the part feels a little busy. I feel the bass..... but it also feels a little low in your mix. These are the two most critical elements outside of your voice to dial in. Again checking out what the people you like, (artists) are doing is a wonderful resource and the best part is..... that it's free! The melody feels balanced... nice job..... and the sections move forward smoothly...... I hope this helps in some way.... Good Luck and Keep Writing! RW

I really like and enjoy your music keep on making great music and never stop creating Growing up as a little kid I use to listen to all types of music keep in touch and have a blessed day God bless you in all your endeavors.

So many writers don't engage in truth as you have here on this song. Most songs have a boastful feel .I really like the authentic parts of this song. I would like to hear more from this artists.

Sometimes is nice to start with a conclusion, So I will. It's hard to hate on a recording like this, as there's such an adoring innocence going on.. First off - overall the mix is sweet, Immediately theres a lovely space and depth with soft eq's that make the ears smile. If I stand back and look at the painting as a whole, not trying to be critical - then it sure is a nice painting. Tho if i step up and look (listen) a little closer then I'd suggest that the drummer in the future simplifies things and just concentrate on how that simple feels - For eg, I think the kick sounds lovely and fluffy.. but i just heard it too much.. doing pointless 'kick stuff'.. That was my main distraction.. lack of confidence in just providing something simple and feel good (especially in the fills). But I liked that picture.

I get to play your song and I get to hear your beautiful song iam amazed to listening to your song all day to day my friend Ilove your song party harn to the flipping world your hear DAT i i

SHORTENING THE INTRO WOULD HELP THIS SONG A TALK SINGING STYLE THROUGHOUT VOCAL PITCHING NEEDS WORK THE BACKING TRACK NEEDS MORE LIGHT AND SHADE THERE IS GOOD SENTIMENT HERE BUT VERY LOW VOLUMES OVERALL TRY MIXING UP WITH SOME CHORD CHANGES WOULD HELP ADD DYNAMICS TO THE SONG KEEP REFINING YOUR WORK AND STREAMLINING THE PROCESS

Lets see, ya. I'm going to try and say something positive here but first the bad news. The vocals were terrible. The music was okay but at times you weren't in sync with it. You tried your best to make this a tender apology but it was totally unbelievable in so many ways. Now for the positive. I found the talking parts to be the best parts of the song maybe because you weren't singing. Look you must know that this wasn't good right? If anyone tells you it was then they are just trying to be nice or not honest with you. I don't get my jolly's given a review like this so in fact, I do apologize~